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That, and the magenta moon of Vetas. Well, there are two others, but I shall not speak of them.

Luckliy, elves are civilized enough not to make paint out of blood. The royals, however, did indeed paint the entire moon, which happens to be around the size of the Moon.

Oh boy!!!! Things just got... wait.

Things just got real bro!

Oh dear...
This is interesting...

Also, twin. I have a bit of a head-canon going off of something stated: "The godmodder is behind everything". The godmodder, as time goes on, gets more and more dangerous, a future version of him, to further his own plans at that point in time, engineered every single bad event that's happened here, including forcing piono's split (and all shenanigans resulting from that), founding the cult of the dark carnival, creating Pr0ject B1nary (or at least instigating serpent's creation of it) and beginning the idea to shut down Godcraft on Earth.

That's obviously in the future, and the workings are so hard to see from where we are that it will not be discovered until a much later DTG game.

Imagine he turns out to be responsible for our existence.

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Oh dear...
This is interesting...

Also, twin. I have a bit of a head-canon going off of something stated: "The godmodder is behind everything". The godmodder, as time goes on, gets more and more dangerous, a future version of him, to further his own plans at that point in time, engineered every single bad event that's happened here, including forcing piono's split (and all shenanigans resulting from that), founding the cult of the dark carnival, creating Pr0ject B1nary (or at least instigating serpent's creation of it) and beginning the idea to shut down Godcraft on Earth.

That's obviously in the future, and the workings are so hard to see from where we are that it will not be discovered until a much later DTG game.

Interesting headcanon... Let's see how the rest of the story goes.

(By the idea to shut down Godcraft, you mean the events after 9/1/14 where the government deemed Minecraft flawed, right?)

Yeah, that's the one.

Bluh. I really need to find a way to improve my writing. I can see a very large 'Mary Sue' plastered over half my characters. Any ideas on how to improve my writing style?

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Bluh. I really need to find a way to improve my writing. I can see a very large 'Mary Sue' plastered over half my characters. Any ideas on how to improve my writing style?

Detail. Picture your characters doing what you plan to write. Then, write exactly what your mind sees. That's what I do when writing.

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Detail. Picture your characters doing what you plan to write. Then, write exactly what your mind sees. That's what I do when writing.

Thanks! I shall try this.

Given my own past attempts at writing {Outside of DTG and the interweb as a whole} Mary Sue/Marty Stu avoidance is... An issue. I have taken some effort to remove elements of such, but there are surely flaws I have not noticed or fixed, in that form or another.

Regardless, that is indeed good advice, Maniac.

Your characters aren't really Mary Sues though... They have flaws, or at least Erelye does. Though for all I know, he behaves exactly like you in real life. That's defientely a minor part of the Mary Sue thing though, author avatars are fine, in my opinion.

Mary and Marty stu's, hmm? I have an awful feeling...

You should read my stories.

"The ears of Eldmann fell insubstantial to any line of inquiry, shade-oriented or otherwise, having devoted the decades of his life to the Study; his abstruse contour carved a pondering shape in the fog carpeting centuries long dead. His eleven subordinates embraced the muted consternation of their great Scholar Predicant as well. Few kept sharper adumbratives or read them with such lucidity, utterly lacking of jejuneness. [...] Lessons to advance the elucidation and prosperity of the human race, and positively refrain from dragging their exemplary cognition down into the darkest depths, found only within the recondite tomes of esoteric mysteries. There were metaphysical puzzles They could not dissect in the recherché wisdom of Their sundry neurons. They dared to pitch Their cherished pupils within the vile melange of historical rogues, nor the heretofore abstract scourge that built up civilizations with ungodly sorcery and tore them apart with joyous malice; this would prove an intellectual trespass to make his calcium-deficient bones quake in repugnance. Still, the abhorrence the disciples had for such beings was rather prodigious. [...]"

Oh, and essentially, yes. Erelye does act in a manner very similar to me. Of course, there are some broad distinctions (such as our individual willingnesses to slay other sentient beings). This is what I find the problem to be. Whether I am overreacting remains to be seen.

My characters are, admittedly, essentially the separated parts of my personality, as I see them, if modified to include more of the technical brilliance and willingness to kill, less of the amateurish pacifist.

Actual character structure aside, Sue/Stu-ness is averted partially by most other important characters in the universe being also human {As in real people, not homo sapiens}, with their own author powers, and thereby immune to centralization around one being, other than Richard himself.

Yeah, Mary Sueness can be avoided by not having a completely unbeatable character (or if you do, not having them be significant.) If you give them character flaws that aren't just meant to build them up more, you have successfully avoided pretty much every Mary Sue trope.

Hey guys! I've been on a bit of a hiatus, but I should be caught up and posting in about 12 hours.

Also, I finally watched Gravity Falls, I'm already caught up with that, and in honor of it I created my own cipher!

try to solve this, and then I'll tell you what the cipher is:

HPPE LQD, L XLNSP ZNOY PZ I PXXM MSZROB.

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You should read my stories.

"The ears of Eldmann fell insubstantial to any line of inquiry, shade-oriented or otherwise, having devoted the decades of his life to the Study; his abstruse contour carved a pondering shape in the fog carpeting centuries long dead. His eleven subordinates embraced the muted consternation of their great Scholar Predicant as well. Few kept sharper adumbratives or read them with such lucidity, utterly lacking of jejuneness. [...] Lessons to advance the elucidation and prosperity of the human race, and positively refrain from dragging their exemplary cognition down into the darkest depths, found only within the recondite tomes of esoteric mysteries. There were metaphysical puzzles They could not dissect in the recherché wisdom of Their sundry neurons. They dared to pitch Their cherished pupils within the vile melange of historical rogues, nor the heretofore abstract scourge that built up civilizations with ungodly sorcery and tore them apart with joyous malice; this would prove an intellectual trespass to make his calcium-deficient bones quake in repugnance. Still, the abhorrence the disciples had for such beings was rather prodigious. [...]"

Oh, and essentially, yes. Erelye does act in a manner very similar to me. Of course, there are some broad distinctions (such as our individual willingnesses to slay other sentient beings). This is what I find the problem to be. Whether I am overreacting remains to be seen.

I know it's probably supposed to be like that, but if you ever want to be published, don't use unnecessary advanced vocabulary. Even if that's how your narrator speaks, or it's the tone you're trying to set, very few people will bother to put in the effort to read it, no matter how good it is. Even if you don't want to publish it... a superfluous quantity of protracted locutions tends to be deplorable to the the majority of readers.

I really don't have a problem with it. Blue doesn't act much like me though ... which is probably a good thing when it comes to my mental state. Red probably has a personality more similar to mine, really, but even then, I wouldn't consider him, or any other character I use in this game, an author avatar, let alone a Mary Sue.

Point taken.

EDIT: On the bits about flaws, I cannot actually detect them, as they are my flaws as well. As such, I do not wish for you to tell me them. Any of you.

I feel like being told your flaws is a good thing most of the time... But, as you request.

Not really, erelye the character is much more prone to throwing himself into stupid situations than you are.

Similarly, neither piono nor Eric are self-inserts, Piono was originally a mockery of the obnoxious jerk that used to be me, but when I introduced Eric and started developing him, I needed a foil for him, and so piono was shifted to fit into that role. At this point, piono reflects my personality almost none, while Eric on the other hand is sort of a form of Mary Sue, in that certain of his character traits that I would particularly like to see in myself have been amplified, while in other terms that are also important to me, he fails. He is not very good at analyzing a situation before he jumps in, and is more easily affected subconsciously (hence the fact that he technically has the worst sailor's mouth of our cast. Whenever I put his stuff in symbols he's either casting a spell or using a really, really bad curse word. Like, worse than russian)